She's never been called glamorous or even an enthusiastic pretty. Her acorn-colored hair hangs simply above her shoulders and sometimes catches a glitter from the reflecting sun. She's constantly trying to keep it tucked behind her ear in hopes that it won't stray, but it usually half-covers her eye in hopes that it one day will cover her whole face and hide her emotions from everyone. Her blue eyes are like a chameleon changing with her every outfit. Sometimes as blue as the ocean on a Caribbean beach while other times they are as dark as a storm rolling across the hills.
Her freckled face makes her appear younger and in the summer they serve to cover most of her nose. Her mother and friends used to tell her that they could tell when she was lying because a freckle under her right eye twitched. She now knows that they were mistaken because she has pulled a few over on them.
Her thin frame often struggles to endure all her emotions. She tries to encase her slender legs with baggy jeans, but her baggy jeans are still a children's size. Most of her clothes end up being hand-me-downs from her friend, so they already have that worn-in look that she loves. Her dream is to see Michael Jordan play basketball and her goal is to visit the Sistine Chapel in Rome. She has no desire to save the world or become the first woman president. She already fulfilled her greatest ambition when she proved the doctors wrong, winning her battle with cancer. Because of this she would ultimately like to find a cure for cancer and save a mother from the same worries her mother had.
She longs to find her own style and not just be another face in the crowd. She has never been one for make-up. In the winter you can see a faint glitter of blush surrounding her cheekbones but in the summer her face is overwrought with red, peeling flesh. Because of her contacts it is hard to do much with her small, marble eyes. If she could make one wish it would be that she could see perfectly.
She attempts to appear strong and confident on the outside but on the inside she is still that shy, insecure, pig-tailed ten-year-old. She is often crying on the inside while laughing out loud. She longs to be accepted but claims others' opinions don't really matter. She preaches that self love is important while she is her own worst enemy. -
This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.
To prepare for this week’s post, I took a look at my notes from the Cheryl Strayed retreat I attended a few weeks ago. I shared what I learned here and here and here. Thankfully, I was able to find a few more gems—and writing prompts.
Today’s topic? Character portraits.
1. Character Portraits Reveal Relationship
A portrait is a description of a person or a group of people.
From Cheryl Strayed, however, I learned portraits also reveal the relationship between a person and the writer (in memoir) or another character (fiction).
For example, a person might describe his father using terms like “looming,” “powerful,” and “spoke with a deep voice.” In addition to providing a physical description, these words evoke some of that fear or intimidation a child may have for his parent.
Another person (his wife, for example) may use completely different words to describe the same man.
So ask yourself, does your portrait reflect the person’s relationship to the speaker?
2. Character Portraits Are About More than the Physical
Cheryl read us a paragraph from a writer about his mother—but he didn’t use a single physical description.
Instead, he wrote, “She was the type of woman who was charming and beloved by strangers, but all of us close to her couldn’t help but walk on egg shells.”
I made this example up because I couldn’t remember the exact paragraph. However, I do remember the author wrote about his mother’s actions, how she made people feel, and what she said, while completely avoiding describing her physical appearance.
You don’t have to eliminate physical description. Rather, I encourage you to consider how you might create an image of a character if you couldn’t describe his or her appearance.
3. Character Portraits Can Be Made for Groups of People
When Cheryl was hiking the Pacific Crest Trail in her memoir Wild, she kept running into a certain type of hiker. This group of hikers spoke a certain way, wore certain gear, and were all hiking for similar reasons. To portray this group, Cheryl decided to combine all of them into one, single character.
In cases where you want to depict a certain type of person, she said, you can choose to either combine those people into a single character, like she did (in memoir, I might add), or you can literally write a portrait of the group.
For example, “The women of Logan Circle wear Lululemon yoga pants, racer-back tank tops, and yoga mats strapped across their backs.” That’s how I would describe certain people in Logan Circle, D.C. It’s not a portrait of one woman, but a type of woman that I always see there.
I understand the fear of stereotyping by describing groups this way. My suggestion is to try to be accurate and fair, but also to not be afraid to lean into your character’s subjectivity.
The real question is how the character would see these people. Would he or she really have a nuanced perspective?
4. When Writing Character Portraits, Follow the HEAT
I wrote down this quote from Cheryl:
When someone you know well does something they always do, that’s a point of heat and interest, and when someone does something they never do, it’s also a place of heat and interest.
In other words, follow the heat.
I think this advice is particularly helpful in memoir. Is there something someone in your life always does? Is it in your description of him or her? If not, it should be!
What about a time when someone did something they never do? Why did they do it? Let us know in the comments!
I have a couple of related writing prompts for you today:
- Write a portrait of someone without describing him or her physically.
- Write a portrait of a group or category of people (or type of person).
- Write a portrait of yourself at your best or your worst.
Choose one of the writing prompts and write for fifteen minutes. When your time is up, share your writing in the comments section. And if you share, please be sure to give feedback to your fellow writers.
Monica M. Clark
Monica is a lawyer trying to knock out her first novel. She lives in D.C. but is still a New Yorker. You can follow her on her blog or on Twitter (@monicamclark).