Letter Essay Example Spm

Hello teacher Nuha, I had viewed your blog yesterday. Your blog is very interesting, it does help me alot ^^

I'm ***, a student from miri, sarawak. a form 3 student and I'm going to face PMR.

I need your help in english. I always get B/C in english exam, but I hope to get A for english in PMR.

Here is my essay, can you help me to mark my english essay?  

You have just spent your school holiday in Malacca. Use the short note below, write a letter to your friend overseas about your holiday in Malacca. 

Historical Sites
  • Visited A Famosa
  • Bought souvenirs

Crocodile Farm

  • saw many species of crocodiles
  • watched crocodile-feeding sessions
Mahkota Parade
  • large shopping complex
  • watched movie in cineplex
A Famosa Water World
  • enjoyed water games
  • picnic

sorry I don't remember the full sentences of the note. I had tried my best to write it out >_< 

so here is my essay. :) the full marks is 35. please give me the marks of my essay ya. >_<

Lot 1305,

Taman Perdana,

Jalan Bakawali,

98000 Miri,

Sarawak.

Dear Margaret,

            Hey! How are you recently? I had received your letter last week. You said you had joined a english essay competition which was organised by your school, and you won the champion! Congratulation! You did a great job! I'm sure that your parents should be proud of you. Besides, sorry for the late reply. Because I have just spent my school holiday in Malacca with my lovely family. So, let's talk about my trip in Malacca.

            On the first day of my trip in Malacca, we went to the historical sites of Malacca, A Famosa. We bought some souvenirs there, we have also take photographs there. After visited A Famosa, we went to visit the crocodile farm. The way to go to crocodile farm was very bumpy and need 2 hours to reach there. But we chat happily with each others so we don't feel tired on the way to crocodile farm.  I saw many species of crocodiles there, it's really interesting! It helped me to exhanced my knowledge. We have also watched crocodile-feeding sessions. I wish that you can watched with me because it's really horrible that many crocodiles get their food together!

            On the next day, we went to Mahkota Parade, which is a large shopping complex and very famous in Malacca. There sell so many things that worth to buy it. The price is so cheap the the things is beautiful with creative. We have also watch movie in the cineplex which is situated in the Mahkota Parade. It had a very large movie screen and it's really comfortable to watch a movie there. After that, we have rest for a while in our hotel and went to the A Famosa Water World which is near by our hotel. We enjoyed water games and had a picnic there. It's so fun!

            We went back to miri on the next day. I had a really sweet memories during the trip. I'm so regret about didn't take photographs when visited the crocodile farm. I've forgot about it. So, that's all about my school holiday. How about you? How do you spent your school holiday? I'm really interested to know about it. Anyways, wish you all the best and have a healthy body. Don't forget to bring my wish to your parents too.  Wait for your reply. God bless.

Your faithfully,

Victoria.

Corrected essay:


Hi ***, 

Sorry for the late reply. Nice to meet someone from across the China Sea virtually.. Thanks for the comment about my blog :)

I've already checked your essay. Good effort ***!  

 

G

uidelines

1.

Sender¶s

D

etails

a. Write your address at the top right-hand corner of the letter 

2

.

D

ate

a. Write the date below the address.b. The date must be written formally but can be written either uppercase or lowercasei. 1 MARCH 2010ii. 1 March 2010

3

.

Salutation

a. Write the salutation on the next line on the left-hand side of the letter.b. Address the person you are writing with ³Dear´«..,c. Make sure you have a comma after the greeting.

4

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Introduction

a. Enquire after the person¶s health or well being by askingi. How are you? I hope you are fine«..:, I am glad to hear that«.´

5

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B

ody

a. Use informal language. Keep the tone personalb. Use simple sentencesc. You can use contractions likei. I¶llii. She¶siii. They¶red. Use informal linking expressions such as ³anyway´,´yet´,´still´ and ³also´.e. Do not use slang or too many casual expressions.f. Minimise the use of lengthy sentences.

6

.

C

losing

a. End your letter with a reference to the reason you wrote and send regardswhere appropriate. Write the closing for your letter using informal phrases likeb. ³Love´, ³Best Wishes´ and ³All the best´.

7

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Signature

a. Only the first word of the signing off begins with a capital letter and the lastword ends with a comma, for example :b. ³Your cousin´, ³Your beloved granddaughter´, and ³Your concerned friend´.

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